Posts Tagged ‘eCritique’

Class 6, Week 3 – More Changes

Thursday, April 22nd, 2010

In week 3 I added quite a few changes to my shot, most of them very successful I think. The first shot in the assignment is starting to look a lot better. There is still some work to be done with the body mechanics, but hopefully I’ll have that sorted out soon so that I can start working on something else.

Here is what I delivered last week:

As you can see there is some big changes to the first shot. As per my mentor critique what I need to work on this week is:

Polishing up the body mechanics. There are still a few places where the body doesn’t feel quite conected, especially when it comes to some of the arm movements. The walk in the beginning is a bit stiff and needs some more work on the spine etc. This also applies to the part where the devil character leans agains the wall.

Most of the facial poses also need some work. As of right now most of them are way to symmetrical and I need to break things up a little in the brows and eye lids respetively. This also need do be done to the mouth. Make things less symmetrical, god damnit!

Those two are the most important things to work on this week. When that is done I’ll take a look at the hands, and add a bit more interest in the fingers. It’s need some more overlap, and there is some twinning going on that needs to go away.

Class 6, Week 2 – Improvements

Wednesday, April 14th, 2010

Got my week 2 eCritique back last night, and I have to say, my mentor, Jason Taylor, gives awesome feedback. He had a bunch of ideas for things I could try out in order to improve my shot, and he has a geat way of explaining things.

Anyway, here is the assignment I delivered last week:

I spendt most of my time last week trying to improve the body mechanics of the shot, and to get rid of large amounts of twinning. So I haven’t gotten around to doing large amounts of actual polish yet, but I will get to that as soon as I have gone through and fixed all of the notes that Jason had.

So my job for this week is to make sure the devil character hits all his acting beats. For example adding a small change in the pose when he says “releasing me…”. Do some more acting with his head, don’t just have him looking forward to whole time, break it up a little.

The part where he brings his arms behind his back is a bit stiff. Have him lean forward, and then straighten up. Generally make the body mechanics even better is what I guess is what I’m trying to say, and thanks to Jason I have a pretty good idea of what needs to be done.

Over all I’m very excited about working on this shot again, which is strange because at the end of class 5 I was not happy with it at all, and I was completely stuck. But now I’m really looking forward to working on it some more.